Teacher Feedback:

Here's the feedback that I recieved from my teacher about my latest DPS, Contents page, and front Cover:


Here is some feedback:

DPS

Like first pic

Need paragraphs and be careful of the length of them

“We are an uprising” or We are uprising?

Use pull quotes

Needs a standfirst

Sub headings to break up text

Models and mise en scene – consider retaking photos – need to be convincing rock stars with convincing costumes

Contents

Same pics as DPS – what else is in your magazine?

A bit boxy

Page numbers not emphasised – be unique (font?)

Cover

Model needs to be looking up to engage with the audience

Mise en scene again – costume? Model? Rock?

Good manipulation of colour and back and white

The play button/logo is behind the bar code

Seems quite simplistic for a rock cover – what has been your inspiration for this?

Slogan is a question – should it be a statement instead?

Main cover line lacks impact because of chosen font

From this, I have decided I am going to play around more with my work. I am going to take some new photos which are more related to the genre of the magazine. I am going to change the small points that have been noted, and hopefully this will be enough to get me the level 4.